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Liannon
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Hay time

Post by Liannon » Sun Dec 12, 2010 5:56 am

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Video: Hay time...
Category: Drama, Romance, Story
Anime: School Days (TV), Kimi ni Todoke (TV), NANA
Song: Moi Photographii
Artist: Smyslovie Gallucinacii
Creator: Liannon

Some alternative story of Kimi ni Todoke.

P.S. I hope someone will help me to translate lyrics of song on english ^^
[Otohiko: got it!]

Lyrics (translated from Russian):
Spoiler :
Semiotic Hallucinations - My Photographs

Grey damp trees
Grow silent, not mentioning the subject
Unconditionally, I believe
Their graceful movements

I tread deeper still
Passing the street corners and fences
I don't reflect in puddles
Don't enter any conversations

My photographs burn,
Words and imprecisions die
This is our mutual biography
Our cloudless past

My journey continues
I slowly walk the outskirts
Dogs scowl behind me
I give them signs of attention

Grey, damp trees
Grow silent, not mentioning the subject
They know what I carry
In a small paper wrapping

My photographs burn
Words and imprecisions die
This is our mutual biography
Our cloudless past

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Re: Hay time

Post by Laerium » Sun Dec 12, 2010 10:50 am

Ohh, nice story going up there ;3 enjoyed watching it. Feels different from normal Kimi ni Todoke AMV's. :)
Only thing I'd point out is that the amv would look so much better without some transitions you got (like on the first part, the circles kind-of-cookie-cutter-thing). Some flashes are a bit overdone too.
But got potencial :3 Totally want to see more works from you. :up:

Keep up!
Last edited by Laerium on Sun Dec 12, 2010 12:23 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Gaurry
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Re: Hay time

Post by Gaurry » Sun Dec 12, 2010 12:14 pm

Excellent vid! The excellent rhythm, an alternative story, a fine scene choice . Color correction presents "Kimi" in drama atmosphere, instead of romanticists.
VCA 2011 best drama/romance (?). And maybe Gaurry 2010 best amv |:>
Laerium wrote: Only thing I'd point out is that the amv would look so much better without some transitions you got (like on the first part, the circles kind-of-cookie-cutter-thing)
Its "transitions to memory". so its fine.
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Re: Hay time

Post by Laerium » Sun Dec 12, 2010 12:22 pm

Gaurry wrote:
Laerium wrote: Only thing I'd point out is that the amv would look so much better without some transitions you got (like on the first part, the circles kind-of-cookie-cutter-thing)
Its "transitions to memory". so its fine.
Well, might be fine for you, but I'm just voicing out my personal taste. I understood the purpose of those.
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Re: Hay time

Post by Magnus » Sun Dec 12, 2010 2:03 pm

Gaurry wrote:VCA 2011 best drama/romance (?). And maybe Gaurry 2010 best amv |:>
Nah.

Video was alright. Mood was pretty good. But editing in comparison was very sloppy. There was some random cuts, quick flashes and blurs to match drum beats that weren't even the focus of the progression of the song's rythm. Which in my eyes looked weird. Short and constant crossfades also made the trasitions look off, to me, and I think if adjusted or withdrawn it could have looked better.

I however liked the lite story you had going on, even if it was rather unclear. And your scene choices were really nice too.
It built up a really nice feel to the end and conclusion of the video, i.e it made out for a nice climax.

So yes, mood-wise it was nice.
Editing-wise, not so much. At least not in my book, sorry.

Good luck on future videos!
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Re: Hay time

Post by AimoAio » Thu Dec 16, 2010 2:49 pm

That was pretty nice. :up: I definitely agree with the others about some of the transitions and effects that just didn't seem to fit however the story really was pretty good. <3 Hope to see more soon! ^^

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Re: Hay time

Post by Kireblue » Thu Dec 16, 2010 3:03 pm

I like the way this was edited. Since I haven't seen the series, I don't really understand what this AMV is about, but it made me very interested.

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Re: Hay time

Post by Gaurry » Thu Dec 16, 2010 4:02 pm

kireblue wrote:Since I haven't seen the series, I don't really understand what this AMV is about, but it made me very interested.
lol. in vid simple alter story
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Re: Hay time

Post by Kitty-Galia » Sat Dec 25, 2010 6:10 am

Great AMV, LIA-chan <3 Good story and atmosphere. GJ! :up:
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