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[AimoAio]

Yeah, that's true. I'm actually using blue to represent scenes in the past, I don't know if that's obvious.

Yep. This I managed to get.

Spoiler :

she goes to see the browned haired guy, which is why it didn't have anything there initially.

It was this bit at 0:21 with 2 scenes that I wasn't sure if it was happening in the present or past since you coloured the scene at 0:24(or maybe it was originally like this) so it looked like a past thing. I felt like it would have fit better if it was a past event anyway because then we see the ring afterwards.

Madara: I don't really have any complaints except a few things: make the feathering stronger for the cutter transition at 0:10 so it's not as noticeable. And I really love the text effects you did but that font just looks horrible to me. >__< I don't know if I'm the only one who has this issue or not so wait for the others opinions first. XD The coloured flash effect at 0:29 looks great, but a little too sharp so smooth it about a little bit.Oh and also a few of your scenes look mega blocky...namely 0:19, 0:20 and 0:24 - any chance of fixing this? Just minor changes really, when you've done those just send the final to me. ^^ Remember it's 848x480 and at 23.976fps lagarith. ^^

iCardioidAMV: This looks really nice, I like your scene selection. ^^ But you might want to smooth out your masking transitions a little more, they look really abrupt to me. And also I would remove the zooming effects at the start and focus on the lyric sync then when the song picks up 0:20 onwards, you can add the zooms in for the beats. If you're worried the pacing feels slow without the zoom effects then simply add some pan/camera movement to the scenes themselves - this normally works great with the lyrical parts of a song and helps create better impact. And also those little glowy circles you used should be made smoother - make them longer, lower opacity and a bigger increase in size. Btw 0:23ish was just perfect. That scene + the zoom really made it feel like it was her heart that was beating in the song. I really liked it.

[CodeZTM]

I will actually review all of these eventually. >_>

[Taite]

@iCardioidAMV

Spoiler :

Wayy better than Working!! haha.
I think everything from :00 to :06 is kind of random. That's the only part that doesn't fit the mood you have going.
A lot of the little zoom/pans you do I think you should take out. Your track is already quite upbeat, and with those little jumps, it looks oversynced. Another thing I noticed is the amount of crossfades. In my personal belief, I don't think really short crossfades work well in any amv. I won't tell you at each and every place I think you should change it, but I'd aim for more hard cuts at larger beats to increase impact, but also get rid of this blending issue you have. Your source has a bit of blending, so crossfades don't help.

I want to say "if you do this, it will look a lott better" sooo bad, but I know everyone has their own tastes and I hate forcing my opinion on people xD

One specific suggestion I have though to spice up your track though is this:
At :12, you have the scene of her sitting on the bed at a distance, then you zoom into her face. What I'd do is keep the zoom that you have on the first distant scene of her on the bed, and remove the crossfade. Then, on the next clip, I'd add a 'levels' effect, increase the brightness on that clip, then fade it back to normal.

Now that's a very specific suggestion that I thought I'd offer up just to give you an idea as to how to make your track more interesting. Most of your track is pretty raw (which I looove, thank you ), but you can add more variety and make it more interesting with simple effects like levels, blur, etc. It will also make it look more polished if you do that, especially if you remove some crossfades and pans. Because this song is so upbeat, that's why I'm suggesting this. I think the zooms are a little overkill at sooome places, but you really have the right idea going. And I love the fact that I've seen scenes in there that I haven't before in other same-anime amvs. It's really refreshing :p

Even though I wrote that much, it really isn't that bad, I'm just super detailed xD I really like it. And please please, if you don't want to take any of my suggestions, that's ok. Keep your editing-identity, I'm just telling you how I think it'd look better as a viewer :p
Good job!

@Aimo. Yeah, at :21, that was the present, after having had sex with the other guy. At :24, do you mean the scene of the brown haired guy smiling? I did color correct that to represent past, because in the scene at :21 where he pulls away, he's upset, and in the next scene you see she is too. The purpose of :24 being in the past was to show her thinking of him and how he used to be. She's remembering him in their/his happy days, further showing what she is giving up.
Also, since you can't see him clearly in the other scene, that was also an opportunity to show what he looked like so it wasn't a wtf moment, but primarily to show that she's sad at giving up him and what they used to have.
But yeah, I still think I'll make those scenes at :21 blue as well. Even though I see every single thing and what it means in here, it'd make more sense to do that for the viewer xp

[[madaraxD]]

alright, thanks for the feedback, about the font, i need change it then?

[AimoAio]

Well you can go ahead and experiment for now if you want or wait for the others responses first. XD I can send you a PM with a few recommendations that you can try out.

[[madaraxD]]

thank you aimo, I'll see how it looks with ur recommendations

[Kousaka]

Thanks for the feedback~! I'll start working on correcting it right now

@AimoAio -
I'll work on the transitions~
I've never really tried pan/camera movement much (actually, this mep is my first time trying zooms too xD), but I guess I could try it out ;A;
Okay!

@Taite -
Okay then. I'll try to find something that fits better.
I think I know which areas you mean, so I'll get to fixing them 8D
Haha! I have no problem with you saying that since I generally like hearing others' opinions. 8D
Okay then! -will be trying out everyone's suggestions-
Also, can you explain this part:

One specific suggestion I have though to spice up your track though is this:
At :12, you have the scene of her sitting on the bed at a distance, then you zoom into her face. What I'd do is keep the zoom that you have on the first distant scene of her on the bed, and remove the crossfade. Then, on the next clip, I'd add a 'levels' effect, increase the brightness on that clip, then fade it back to normal.

As in, keep the zoom, and when it (or as it) zooms into her face, add the levels effect?
(Just trying to understand so that I don't mess up xD)

[Taite]

Well, on the first scene at :12, where you can see her sitting on the bed at a distance, you have a zoom on that clip. Leave that as it is and don't add anything. Then, (if after removing the crossfade) you have the second clip of just her upper body/face with no apparent effect on it. On that clip only, you add a level to it, increasing the brightness a little, and let it add a keyframe to that effect, making it go back to normal, but not too quick. You can mess with it.
That's just a suggestion of course, if it looks weird when you do it don't worry bout it :p Have fun with it

[Kousaka]

Oh, okay. Thanks for the suggestion! 8D
I tried it out and it looks much better than just the plain zoom (in my opinion at least).
I'll be sending out the corrected beta soon~

[Rider4Z]

sorry for being a flake, i've just been discouraged cuz my footage isn't behaving. soon as i get back from ALA this weekend i'm going to jump on my track. my second beta/final is going to likely have a lot of differences than the first so i can get around the problems, but i promise it'll be a bomb opener.