Bakemono funny AMV [Need your advise]

[Blcksheep]

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3wZOqwgdkqQ

Here it is ! My new AMV based on the anime : Bakemonogatari
I try to change the atmosphere of the anime (which is dark) to something fun and comics.

Feel free to comment (tips, advises, negative and positive comments) to help me to improve future amv

[because they are funny^^]

[Shinzui IT]

I like the source selection, but it feels that the video overall is missing energy. The way you added your text and creative ideas doesn't fit in well and needs to look more natural. Your scenes do not have enough energy into them either which is another problem. I see you wanted to create something really fun and random, but try editing towards some type of story into it. I don't mean selecting scenes to slow the speed down to create a story, but there are a variety of ways to create a story out of this you just need to involve an incredible amount of thinking, time, and effort into this.

For this try being more creative with this and make your creativeness look really natural. Like for instance try referencing something like a set of mirrors, a set of pictures, a website design, and etc. and take those looks and style them into your video.
Here is this for example (Not the original editor's channel, but it's the only upload that's on youtube):
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=u9rBEO1lLIA

Original video:
http://www.nicovideo.jp/watch/sm27681246


My advice is to rework on this more and try to find something that will inspire you and that "something" can be anything, life related for instance. Also try to spend more time on this and try new things. Good luck!

[Blcksheep]

Well, these comment really help me a lot ! I write down everything you said to improve next creation.
The video example is a pretty good selection of natural fx and give me some ideas of story telling and text insertion

Thanks a lot !

[Aleth]

You know? my only problem... is the way you put the lyrics, sometimes looks akward
but don't get me wrong, i really like the color palette because fits pretty well with the music, which leads me to the lyrics, they are cartoony and go along with the rest of the video. BUT sometimes they are just... i don't know how to explain it, i'll say: "too robotic/cardboard".

[Blcksheep]

Ok ! That's interesting ! I think i get what you try to explain.
Someone told me too, that the text incrustation can be improved ("use in such a way to be more integrated in the scene effect, not Pop or appear from no where").

Thanks for the comment Aleth