No offense but the story it's kinda boring, like been there done that. And the names, did you randomly chose them or you really thought about them. They sound silly, and obviously made up, not natural. Yhe viewers need some names that they remeber. Who the hell memorises those names. Try something like spike, ed, kenshi and so on ( not those but easier to remember). Once again don't get upset by this, i think you put a lot of work into it, but if i were you. which i'm not, i'd drop this story. It's plain silly.
But than again, we've all seen animes with silly stories right?
New anime I created. Need help...
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krzT
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Re: it sucks
i definitely agree.cilu wrote:No offense but the story it's kinda boring, like been there done that. And the names, did you randomly chose them or you really thought about them. They sound silly, and obviously made up, not natural.
An anime takes so much more planning than what it seems that you have here. And honestly, I don't think your year and a half of planning is enough. If you really want this made into an anime, you need to think deeper than shallow romances and blowing up schools. Creating ANY type of story takes a great deal of time and thought. Just look at Miyazaki. It takes him ages to create new ideas for movies [not even series] and he's a freaking genius!
You can't just spontaneously say "and she falls in love with him...." Why does she fall in love with him? How does she react to her feelings? How does he feel about her? What consequences are created because of their love? I don't see any of that here. It looks just like random fairytale fiction to me...and no offense...but nothing special.
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jasper-isis
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I'm assuming from your posts that you're on the younger side of the age range of this site. The best thing to do would be to wait a year or two. Yes, you heard me right. Sit on the idea for a few years. Maybe make some sketches, but don't do anything drastic or get ahead of yourself. Then when you're a bit more mature, you can look back on the story and decide whether it REALLY is worth your troubles.
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someperson
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True, that's probably the best thing to do. Your personality, tastes, and view on life and situations in general can change a lot (reminicing: I know I changed a lot from when I was 14). If you let your ideas sit for a while, then it will be easier to find the flaws in them when you decide to get back to writing your story. At least that's how it is when I draw.
Meaningless babble about my scribbles wrote:I usually sketch or start drawing a character or something, then I'll flip the paper over and leave the drawing alone (sometimes hours, sometimes days) then when I pick up the drawing again I can pick out the flaws and fix it. Great story huh?
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AMVfreak
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android21
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Jasper-Isis wrote:I'm assuming from your posts that you're on the younger side of the age range of this site. The best thing to do would be to wait a year or two. Yes, you heard me right. Sit on the idea for a few years. Maybe make some sketches, but don't do anything drastic or get ahead of yourself. Then when you're a bit more mature, you can look back on the story and decide whether it REALLY is worth your troubles.
i don't do young. Age 14 Number of years i've been on thin story:3
if it kicks ass i like it.
if it gets someone else to kick ass for it i love it.
if it gets someone else to kick ass for it i love it.
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android21
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jasper-isis
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See that's the problem. You're gonna need a LOT more experience with these things if you wanna succeed. You have to be ready to present yourself and your project in the most appealing way.android21 wrote:How do you put screencaps? I Have a scanner but i don't know how to Put them on this page... Please help.AMVfreak wrote:You have any screen caps to show us?
I want to see how good you are at drawing
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When you have your pictures scanned and compressed to a reasonable size, find a web server that can host them. Build a webpage for your story universe. Then give us a link. Give us something more than just a vague story. Instead of aiming to make this into an anime, focus on building a fandom for your idea both online and off-line. The fans could include friends and famlily, then gradually spread to people you don't know, as your website gains more popularity. Feel free to correct me if I'm wrong, but isn't this how the burgeoning Megatokyo was started?
